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    Log line for a story

    Discussion in 'General Writing' started by Irina, Feb 16, 2012.

    Can you please tell me how to write a log line for my story. How to put everything in one sentence?
     
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    you basically need 3 things. a main character ( don't refer him by name), a goal, and opposition. some high concept shit is also good. be original. no more that 25 words. eat cake. lots of cake.
    Stupid example here :
    - character : Lawyer
    - Goal: save his wife from a street gang
    - Opposition: the street gang leader is his favorite famous rapper (ahahah this is sooo stupid sorry, i might be drunk ( not really ))

    So it could be: Trying to save his 2nd wife, a pessimist lawyer, must chose between his love for a woman or his love for gangster rap music.

    This, is how not to do a log line, i guess the best tip i can give you is try harder than me. take your time to think it thru. once you've got something, go try it on people. see how they react. do they seem interested?
     
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    If you have cable tv, read short infos on series and movies, they are usually really good examples of what you are asking about :)
     
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    This is a great idea.

    I heard that it is easier to write a log line if you write something longer than it needs to be and just keep cutting off bits until it's a better size. I also have heard that up to 50 words is good. Although I know from experience that it's a true talent to write log lines or a synopsis for that matter, a talent I don't really have.
     
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    for screenplays, loglines need to be 25 words or less... the tag lines you see in movie/tv listings are not quite the same, as they're meant to be more a tease, than a concise summary of the premise... i have a good 'how-to' on writing loglines, by a chief story exec at wm morris that i'll be happy to send you, if you drop me a line...

    love and hugs, maia
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    Also, remember tension. Tension's good too. Keep tension in mind. TENSION.
     
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    when do you use these in fiction writing?
     
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    when you try to sell your novel.
    if someone ask you what your novel is about instead of saying and I quote:
    '' mmmmm, well there's this guys, with mmm phillip jones, that's his father and they go to kill the president but mmmm yeah you should know that joey is sick, but yeah, and he falls in love with a girl in a restaurant, it's really good i swear''

    Instead of saying this you say something like:
    ''A mild-mannered Jewish doctor struggles with bizarre personality changes, unfamiliar slaughterhouse memories and increasingly violent episodes after receiving an emergency heart transplant of unknown origin.''

    BOOM your book is sold. that's when & how you use it.
     
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    Of course. It makes sense. :rolleyes:
     
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    I associate 'mmm' with pleasure derived either from food or perhaps from sex. So the mental image I'm getting from that first sentence is... scary. 'umm' and 'uhh', not 'mmm'.
     
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    ahahaha sorry for the mental image, i'm french and in french we don't use ''ummmm''' i didn't even think about it ahaha
     

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