I was a little bit doubtful about my writing, as I'd only ever let my friend and English teacher read it, so I decided to get a thrid opinion from my mum. Two words: Confidence. Suicide. My mum's training to be a teacher, so spoke her mind. I know I'm not the best writer, and I know it was a first draft and would end up getting changed anyway, but was it really that bad? I've decided what my problem is, through my mum's criticism, that I know too much about the world and the scene, so sometimes just assume the reader does too. I have a habbit of starting off with nothing, just what the characters are doing and revealing things about them later on, through speech etc. She also told me I'm way too descriptive. So, does anyone have any advice on describing effectively (without boring the reader), and subtly revealing aspects of the plot without just putting it out there as, "BOB IS A... HE'S DOING..." Any adivce welcome! Thanks!