Hello. I am in need of help with comma placement for the following sentences. After staring at my story for hours, I am becoming a bit bleary-eyed. Any help would be greatly appreciated. Thank you. "Other citizens soon rallied around Charlie and on Election Day he was elected mayor of Johnstown in a sweeping victory. His tenure would be short-lived however when on inauguration day he was seen sleepwalking in public." "Suddenly the sound of thunder arose and in the distance a gray cloud appeared." "There mounted on the wall were two deer heads staring back at them." "Sometimes I'll throw on some cheese but it really just depends." "Town officials now began calling for the park's permanent closure but owners Ted and Betty Shanks remained adamant." "They're great to huddle under. Plus when it's all over you can just hose it off."