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    Need Help With Titles

    Discussion in 'General Writing' started by carsun1000, Mar 29, 2016.

    Hello,

    I have completed these two works and I am seriously thinking about moving forward with both of them (debating self-publishing or traditional publishing).

    I, however, don't have confidence in my titles as being catchy enough to propel readers to pick up something new from an unknown author.

    Reading the synopsis and looking at my titles for both works, what would you rename them?

    Also, if I do self-publishing, will it make sense to release both at the same time since they are based on different characters and settings (one is in Leesville, Louisiana, and the other is in Colorado Springs, Colorado)? The Stevie Archer character has a follow-up I am currently working on.

    Just trying to navigate through this web for now.

    Synopsis to my two books:

    BACK FROM THE DEAD

    A CSPD Detective Stephen (Stevie) Archer wakes up from his coma to continue the hunt for the killer that wounded and sent into coma in the first place. The hunt for this serial killer dubbed The “Eye Gouger” revealed an unsolved attempted murder case dating back twenty years in Albuquerque. Now, both Det. Stevie Archer and his team and the Albuquerque Police Department (APD) Cold Cases Division must race against time to stop the relentless killer from striking and killing the second-chance detective and innocent people for good. (Word count:105800)

    THE FORGOTTEN CRIME

    During the last days of WWII, and during the sweeping of the city of Torgau, along the Elbe River on the 25th of April 1945, a squad of American soldiers took advantage of a seventeen-year-old German girl. The girl was rescued by an officer from the unit doing the sweeping. After the war was over, the officer, Donald Springton returned to Germany and marry the girl he rescued. Sixty-six years later, and after Donald’s death, Roxy Springton decided to go after the men who raped her.

    Meet one of the most ruthless killers for hire named the Trashman and an innocent janitor and immigrant from Yemen, Tariq Malwan, whose paths crossed one cold night in Leesville. Enter the odd duo’s hunt for the squad members or their families, and the race against time by FBI Special Agent Jesse Winston and Leesville Police Department’s Robert Minkus and Linda Sanders in stopping the killing of WWII veterans or their families. Will they succeed in stopping the hired killer from Chechnya and the newly-converted Jihadist from Yemen before it’s too late? (Word count 119388)
     
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    If you go the traditional publishing route, chances are the publisher will work with you to come up with a title. Other than that, it's hard for us to help because we don't know the novels as intimately as you do. For some ideas, consider themes, phrases from the works, etc. for inspiration.
     
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    Thanks.
     
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    I don't have any eye catching title suggestions for you, but I wonder if your title should more accurately depict the story. "Back from the Dead" seems a bit different than coming out of a coma, I can see the correlation but comatose and dead seem different to me. Maybe a reference to the detectives memory driving the story. A similar thought about "The Forgotten Crime", the issue here is that the victim has not forgotten nor forgiven, so something like "Crime Unforgiven" hits closer to home for me. However I can see where your title has to be a selling point if you go the self publish route and hopefully things will work out for you, the stories sound interesting.
     
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    "Back from the dead" is a solid book title, but it is overused. It can work and prosper, but it will take more effort to separate from the hundreds of poems, games, and books with that label. Also, this decade has seen a rise in public interest in zombies and the undead, so my first thought was "oh, another one of those." Again, on its own, the name captivates.

    As I read through your synopsis, I noticed the a coma is directly related to the motive to catch the criminal.
    I was playing with this idea: From A Coma, To A Killer. Or... "Out of a coma, on the hunt"
    "Once Unconscious: Payback!" (This leaves room for a series. "Once Unconscious: *Knot Anymore"... could be a sequel)
    You create a brand that pulls, is conscise, and yet suggests a mystery

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    I'll reply to the next one.... in a bit.
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    "Knot" is on purpose, it can apply to someone was about to get married, but then...
     
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    You said:
    "THE FORGOTTEN CRIME

    During the last days of WWII, and during the sweeping of the city of Torgau, along the Elbe River on the 25th of April 1945, a squad of American soldiers took advantage of a seventeen-year-old German girl. The girl was rescued by an officer from the unit doing the sweeping. After the war was over, the officer, Donald Springton returned to Germany and marry the girl he rescued. Sixty-six years later, and after Donald’s death, Roxy Springton decided to go after the men who raped her.

    Meet one of the most ruthless killers for hire named the Trashman and an innocent janitor and immigrant from Yemen, Tariq Malwan, whose paths crossed one cold night in Leesville. Enter the odd duo’s hunt for the squad members or their families, and the race against time by FBI Special Agent Jesse Winston and Leesville Police Department’s Robert Minkus and Linda Sanders in stopping the killing of WWII veterans or their families. Will they succeed in stopping the hired killer from Chechnya and the newly-converted Jihadist from Yemen before it’s too late? (Word count 119388)

    My reply:
    I see the girl being an important part of the rest of the story. A girl being picked on is one of the worst offenses; therefore, I think utilizing the "girl" in your title, along with your "forgotten, but-not" theme will tug a reader for that kind of content. Here is a starter idea: "A Girl No More," "When Girls Get Back,"
    "A doll and her soldier(s): Overcoming" ... "When she grows up, she'll go after you." --this calls for a response, you can use that phrase at the end of the book.

    Question... Are these 2 different stories?
    I got lost during the second paragraph.

    (Note: 17 years old, then 66 years later? That is 83.)
     
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    Yes, the two stories are the same. Roxy hires ruthless killer (who hires Tariq) to kill those who wronged her. Thanks foor the ideas on the book title.
     
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    Thanks for the clarification. I hope it works out.
     

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