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    Geekopolis New Member

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    On or by...I'm a little flummoxed.

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by Geekopolis, Jul 22, 2012.

    Okay, (Hi, first time poster here)

    I'm writing a scene where my protagonist is grabbed by two soldiers. I've written (gripped on both arms) but I'm not sure if it should be (gripped by both arms) and both sound right but I dunno, I guess I wanted a second opinion.

    Any takers?
     
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    peachalulu Member Reviewer Contributor

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    Could you post the sentence - that way we could see if it looks and sounds right.
     
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    "By" sounds better than "on", but I agree that seeing the sentence in question might help.
     
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    "A hand caught her hood yanking her to her feet, struggling against her captors Ellery threw her body forwards but found herself gripped on both arms by two armoured men who towered over her."

    I just realised looking at that how many times I used the word her. Haha oh well this is still the first draft.
     
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    It should be 'gripped by' instead of 'gripped on'
    Although, the sentence kinda needs a bit of work...but yeah, first draft :D
     
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    I agree, 'by' I also agree that you need to work on the sentence.
     
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    Thumpalumpacus Alive in the Superunknown

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    Yes, "by".
     
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    yes, 'by'... but then you need to reword what comes next, so you're not repeating it...

    also, everything up to the comma is a totally separate sentence, can't be tacked onto what comes next and make any sense...
     

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