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    On Shaving

    Discussion in 'General Writing' started by promethean, Jan 7, 2007.

    I do comprehend by a forward advancement
    of my thoughts, this Rosicrucian and Chaldean
    vestige retained in every individual mind and
    life; which are when observed within their
    elocutive and universal incompatibilities, of the
    benefitting of various implicit faculties of the
    universe- that the boeotian and ignominious
    men whom choose to epilate and partake of
    that tonsorial and occult turpitude therein of
    that adulterating of the natural form do ignore.
    We must begin to compose our lives in a manner
    hypogean and gremial to the activity of drawing
    from the opulent and uberous repository of the
    feral antiquities of our character a continual
    and accepting source of inspiration.
     
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    About shaving...

    ...right.

    What's it mean?
     
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    Sure, but it's also natural for people to run around naked. Somehow I don't think saying "but my distant ancestors ran around naked" is going to keep me from getting arrested. If not shaving is "keeping it real" for you, cool. But just because you naturally grow hair doesn't mean you MUST grow hair.

    Is somebody giving you grief about having a beard?
     
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    ...I still don't get it. Can someone please tell me what it means?
    Like, please?
     
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    My father in law has a beard and it looks pretty dang good. I don't know, I'm one of those women who like a bit of hair on a man. What do you think about lazer hair removal, promethean? Once you get it lazered a few times, it never comes back! Ahh!
     
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    Good poem, but I don't think that it's accessible enough.

    Good flow though.
     
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    This is a section of a book I am writing. I am looking at the beard as a symbol, as a vestige, a remnant of the antiquity of human character, which is observed as savages in the wild, uncaring of their physical appearances, distanced from the ideas of beauty that are more commonly found in city life. By no means is shaving "wrong" but it can be looked at as a symbol, like I am doing right here. A homage to a more ancient way of living. It can be symbolic for not just this reverence of the wild life, but also for uncaring and "configured" apathy.
     
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    if you're writing your entire book in that kind of pretentious and often meaningless gobbledygook, i hope you're prepared to pay for publishing it on your own... and to have to give it away, when no one wants to buy it...

    i'm not saying this to be mean, but to be helpful... you seem to think you have to use ten-buck words to sound 'literary' or something, but it doesn't work... especially when so many of those fancy words are not used properly or in meaningful context...

    i strongly suggest you lock up your thesaurus and learn to write more simply and with generally-accessible meaning, if you hope to sell your work...

    love and hugs, maia
     
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    Ditto m. It's not the size, it's how you use it.
     
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    wow That made me feel realllly dumb.
     
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    WOW......atleast I understand the title
     

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