Instead of seeking feedback, I'd like to share the progress I've made with my query letter. And perhaps seeing the stages in development will help others. The novel is called Bastard of Chivalry, but I haven't put that in an intro paragraph just yet. Brandon Calumet doesn’t believe the world is real, but he still has to live in it. This belief comes about in childhood when Brandon develops exebellon, a rare condition where one experiences prolonged periods of déjà vu. While most cases result in schizophrenia, or other disorders, Brandon struggles to embrace exebellon by channeling it through his art, but especially into his pursuit of girls. And because of the latter, the world whether real or not, Brandon wants to live in it. Oh, if only girls didn’t make it so hard for him. Growing up in the 1980’s and 90’s is not all baseball cards and arcade games. Being bullied by white kids for not acting ‘black’, and laughed at by black kids for acting ‘white’, Brandon hides his exebellon in attempts to form his identity. Yet, as he grows from an American son branching out of the suburbs into a b-boy stance, Brandon’s secret guides him through the bad of everything good in relationships, and eventually to Chicago’s art college scene. It is here, where love seeks revenge. Here, Brandon is hip, blending into social circles near the turn of the century. And this is how he’s introduced to the mythology surrounding exebellon. But when he discovers a link between his true self and this mythology, Brandon either achieves transcendence—or succumbs to madness.