Hello! I’ve been working on a query letter for my novel for a while now, and I’ve read the stupid thing so many times that I could probably recite it in my sleep. I could use a pair of fresh eyes. Could somebody out there who has not read it a million times take a look and let me know what you think? Thanks a ton! --- The query: Jessie Corbin hasn’t even graduated high school yet and there’s already some maniac trying to kill her. This isn’t one of the bullies she normally picks fights with, either. His name is Steven Thorne. He’s a time traveler. And he’s come from thirty years in the future to get revenge for something she hasn’t even done yet. He won’t tell her exactly what it is, but Jessie’s pretty sure he deserved it. Either way, she has no intention of dying tonight. As Jessie tries to evade Thorne, though, she runs into another time traveler—this time, a version of herself from about eight hours in the future. Future Jessie was sent back by accident and isn’t exactly helpful. Especially not when Thorne is seconds away from killing them both. The current Jessie might not know anything about time travel, but she does know an opportunity when she sees one. If she fakes her death, Thorne will assume he’s succeeded and go back to his own time. She could kill the future version and use the body to divert the murderer. Or she could NOT do that, because that would mean eight hours from now she’s going to end up as a dead body herself. Jessie’s instincts tell her to take option number one, although she realizes about two seconds too late that her instincts are complete crap. Thanks to this brilliant idea, she has eight hours to figure out how to rewrite the future, survive the night, and avoid blowing a hole in the space-time continuum. Also, she’s going to have to stay ahead of the man who wants her dead, because her suicidal plan didn’t even work. Thorne wasn’t fooled, and he’s coming for her. Unless Jessie’s past version kills her first. CHRONOCIDE is a 97,000-word YA science fiction novel. I am a freelance writer whose work has appeared in a number of local publications, although unfortunately my time travel experience is somewhat limited. [Insert whatever I feel is necessary for a specific agent—I read an interview where they said they liked time travel, I liked a book they repped, yada yada yada.] Thank you for your consideration.