I'm not at all good at letters of any kind. After trying out the advice I've seen on various sites, as well as some advice I've been given, I'm still stuck on this query letter.No matter how many sites I read, my mind just can't seem to wrap around the whole 'query letter' idea. I've posted two of my better versions here. I know neither are perfect and putting both together would make it awfully long. Is either one heading in the right direction? Or should I be going another way entirely? Can anyone recommend something I can do that might put me on the right path? ------ I am seeking representation for my fantasy novel, THE ROGUE KING, complete at 132,000 words. Version 1: Very little of Koral’s self has belonged to him; his body has unwillingly been given to one god, his soul stolen by another, even his shadow is owned by the devil. He’s taken most of it in his stride, especially when it allows him to live somewhat peacefully with the woman he loves. When she disappears the day their son is born, with only a message to never follow, he's determined to track her down and he’ll do anything to get her back. Even if it means eternity in hell. or ... Version 2: Discovering the woman he loves has disappeared the day of their son’s birth, Koral refuses to believe she went willingly. Not even when the message she left tells him that she never again wants to see him or the child. Between keeping his son safe and his exile from the kingdoms, he is unable to track her down. Upon hearing she’s been ‘chosen’ to become a priestess for a knowingly cruel god, he risks discovery and death to reach the only person who will help him find her. On his way, he’s informed that he’s more than just another Rogue; he is the prince to a people believed extinct for centuries. Thank you for taking time to read my letter.