I am in the middle of the revision of my current novel and couldn't figure out why it sounded so bad. It read badly, sentences felt choppy even though they shouldn't be, and it somehow lacked a little depth I guess. Then I sat down with a printed copy of my last three revised chapters (and a glass of wine) and alternated between reading a paragraph of my own ms and a published book in the same genre of a writer I like, just to try to understand how it was different and then it somehow hit me. It's probably not the sentences that are choppy, it's the fact that they keep the same pace all the way through the entire ms. It's chick-lit, so it's quite fast paced and easily read, but I want to know how I can vary the pace of the text in the best way, to make it flow more easily for the reader. I have a few ideas: *zooming in from time to time, take the time to notice minor details in the surroundings or in a character I guess would slow down the pace for a while *alternating sentence lenght (which is something I already try to do in my revision) That is what I could come up with, is this correct? Are there other ways too? Plus, every how often should i vary the pace? I would really appreciate your help, because this would make my story read a lot better and I think it would be the solution to the whole problem.