Can I get your opinion about this paragraph? It is the first paragraphs of the first chapter and I have reworked it several times now. I need it to be perfect before I continue edit any further. A few candles illuminates the dark room from his desk. An elderly man is bent over a piece of parchment, copying the words from the book next to him. Suddenly a gush of wind extinguishes the light and scatters the papers and other pages on the desk as a door opens in the hallway. The old man sighs heavily, grabbing his neck-long beard, knowing exactly how much time it will take to organise them again. As he stands up and enters the hallway he is met by a young boy in his early teens removing his water soaked jacket.