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    Share the plot of your story

    Discussion in 'General Writing' started by Miller0700, Sep 22, 2016.

    Since sharing the first three sentences' thread is off to a good start, why not start with this one. You can share the plot of any short story or novel you are working on or plan to write. Others can give feedback or whatever.

    I'll start:


    Border City was created 75 years ago and people were soon invited to live, work and play in the city. Little did they know that it was for an unethical, yet promising experiment. Back then scientists had created a series of small red capsules known as “Infernogen.” The capsules were created in a classified project known as “Frontlines.” The scientists soon released it into the air, water, and soil of the City. Because Border City resided in a depression, the scientists didn't have to worry about the Infernogen going anywhere else. The Infernogen's initial purpose is to increase brain power by boosting the citizen's intellectual capacity while diminishing neurological diseases such as Alzheimer’s and psychological ones such as depression. Border City was to be the ideal city that all cites worldwide would soon want to strive towards. Infernogen would've been marketed as "the next cure for Polio."

    The Infernogen worked well in the trail run, but something went wrong when it finally got to humans. Instead of heightened IQs, people began hallucinating. Real life blurred with fantasy. The city inhabitants soon embraced their visions as reality, so the lid on the project was yet to be blown. Instead of abandoning their project, the scientists studied the effects of the Infernogen on the population in hopes of perfecting it. To be sure the secret would never be revealed a secret task force was created to silence those who found out about Project Frontlines.
     
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    Sounds like the Infernogen scientists are real monsters! You gave a great background, but if I were reading this to see if I wanted to buy the book, I'd want to know who the main character is and what he/she is going to do in the story. If what you wrote is the story, and we read how Border City progresses throughout the book, I think you should personalize this more to what the MC is going to experience.

    Or am I looking too much for back-cover blurb type stuff? I don't really know how to give feedback for plots.
     
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    Summary of my current WIP, tentatively titled "Lifted Spririts":

    When Kishore Cheruvalath finds himself burned out from trying to climb the cutthroat ladder of the pharmaceutical industry, he cuts ties and tries for a new start in an unknown city. The dilapidated house he plans to renovate is a decent enough gamble, and even comes with a welcoming and attractive next door neighbor, Daniel Voigt.

    But quickly unsettling events occur in Kishore’s new home; without explanation, items relocate through the house, things go bump in the night, and shadowy figures lurk in the corners. Soon Kishore is unable to shake the feeling that his house might be haunted. Can Kishore and Daniel figure things out before it overshadows their burgeoning romance, or might the ghosts of the past be able to ultimately stand in their way?
     
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    Just Friends

    Teenage loner Kevin is more interested in finishing high school than girls- that is in until he meets his 18 year old cousin Dianna at a family reunion, and my, has Dianna grown. Now Kevin has six months to break up Dianna and her jock boyfriend, convince her not to leave for Europe fashion school next fall, and get her to fall for her lanky underage relative. There's also Dianna's family German shepherd, who....well, let's not get into that here...Welcome to Just Friends, where everyone wants a piece, and no one is really "just friends."
     
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    Cornwall, UK. Jay and Harry enjoyed an evening at the pub. A few beers, few games of pool, and a dust up later. They make their way home, enjoy a bottle of jack together before spending a day in a self induced coma. They wake to find the world torn apart, nothing is the same, and the dead walk.
    The story starts five days into the apocalypse. Followed by a flashback to the night of the beers, pool and fight.
    We see the surprising arrival of two survivors before embarking on a journey to a safe area, RNAS Culdrose. On the way, they meet another survivor, a group of nasty people, a Siberian husky, lots of infected. There's some nice battles, quick humour, characters growing and adapting to the new world. Heartache and mystery, and a formidable foe, a creature that stalks the night. Will they make it to Culdrose? Is it really safe? Will they find more survivors? What's this mystery I talk about?
     
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    A man tries to survive and make his way through a world gone mad, where humanity is on the brink of extinction.
    Where the line between monster and human seems to be thinner and thinner and sometimes disappear entirely.
    All the while struggling with immortality and fighting to hold on to his humanity and his sanity, while being haunted by ghosts he'd rather had stayed dead.


    Now that I look at it that way, it really sounds like the trailer for a bad b-movie horror flick :p
     
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    I struggle with writing blurbs so, here's my plot.

    Durus, Lord of Dunmouth and Marquis of Dunend is dead. Arm removed and throat slit. Corrin did not come to Dunmouth to investigate. He came to ensure "The gold keeps on flowing" to his home. Yet the city suffers more than one death. A plague has rampaged its way through one of the lower districts, and the lord's murder has inspired a series of fanatical attacks. When Corrin visits Durus's heir, the woman makes it clear she has no intention of paying. In a last ditch attempt, he makes a proposal. He will find her father's killer, in return for the money he needs.
     
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    A feudal society, divided by age-old feuds and crippled by plague and rampant poverty, threatens to be ripped apart when a new religion tries to violently impose itself upon the population. To make matters worse, the new ruler of the largest city unfolds his megalomaniac plan of uniting the realms by conquest, and an old and mysterious race of obscure but revered entities is growing ever more restless as the conflict threatens to overshadow the reverance that is due to them. Tired of human quarelling, they unleash a curse upon men, one that eats them from the inside out and may just be their undoing. In this troubled setting, we follow two political underdogs, a warlord, and a young peasant boy as war once again threatens to destroy an already troubled land. How will they react while the world falls apart around them? Can they recognize that armed conflict is not the greatest curse that can befall them? The fires of war are one thing, the decay of all one has ever known is a different horror altogether.
     
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    After the suicide of their close friend, a group of friends reunite for his funeral to only to find out he had left them a series of personal letters. When his final words puts a strain on the group, their trust and relationships are tested with each other and those close to them, which leads them to discover secrets and ugly truths about each other and their lost friend.
     
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    It was the call DI Simon Skinner had been dreading, another murder. But not just a murder, one with a direct link to his current investigation. So unfolds the case of the Cupid killer, a serial killer who is killing lonely people on Valentine's Day each year by driving an arrow through their heart. Obsessed with this deranged case, Skinners own life and mind begins to unravel, until six years and six unsolved murders later, Skinners own marriage breaks down, and he finds himself alone in his apartment on Valentine's Day, and there is someone in the shadows outside.
     
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    been up to, since he has been frozen 150 years. The evidence turns out to be true to his 'enemy's' word,
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    they wreak havoc and hell on the faction in contempt. And in the end they only hope they can gain
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    "Cottonwood" takes place in a small southern town. The sheriff is corrupt (surprise, right?) and there is a man behind him pulling the strings (remember Boss Hogg from The Dukes Of Hazzard?). Everyone does as they are told until a retirement age New Jersey native moves into town with his sidekick. The northerner gets into some dust-ups with the local sheriff and decides to remove him from power in the upcoming election. Problem is everyone is too scared to vote for a replacement. What no one knows is that the northerner is a 'retired' mafioso and isn't afraid to do what mafia dons do. Sprinkle in competing love interests, a daughter who doesn't know what her dad did for a living and a sidekick obsessed with becoming a redneck despite his Italian blood and entertainment results (hopefully).

    "Diner" (working title) sees a handful of travelers come together in a Nebraska roadside diner during a blizzard. Two are kidnappers. One is the victim. One is a man intent on rescuing her from the kidnappers. Two more arrive to take the kidnapped girl for a cash payment. Add a state trooper who arrives having no idea what is going on and a waitress intent on riding off into the proverbial sunset with the Intent Man. Murders, surprise character motives and the problem of being trapped in one place round it out.
     

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