OK so let me try this sub-forum again. I don't know about the 'sticky quality', maybe I need a more causal eureka/inspiration sub-forum for these little things. I'm working on getting the hang of description writing and this source was particularly useful: http://writetodone.com/how-to-write-better-descriptions/ It wasn't so much that it had great advice as it opened my eyes to something I hadn't quite grasped, description is part of the story. That may seem like a no brainer so let me explain. I'd been going about it trying to write what my narrator/character saw around her. I wanted to describe this fantastic world of wonder but it was coming off flat, and I wasn't doing a good job of it anyway. I was trying to do that but missing the key point, letting my protagonist passively react to the setting. What dawned on me as I thought of this was making the setting an active part of the story I am telling. Your character is frightened: make the room itself part of the thing she fears. Your character is bewildered: make the setting not just the action bewildering. ... and so on. For example my character enters a room to meet a man she's very frightened of. Suddenly the room itself is consuming her like entering the den of a lion. The furniture is towering over her, the walls closing in, the chair she's to sit in is uncomfortable and feels small as the man looks down on her from behind his desk. So not only is the man part of the story, his office is an extension of that story. I'll let you know how it goes with the next scene after this scary office.