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    shepdog329 - Weekly Poetry Contest (168) Winner

    Discussion in 'Bi-Weekly Poetry Contest Archives' started by Banzai, Nov 4, 2011.

    Lost In Translation
    By shedpog329


    If my swallowed breath to whistled fall airs
    No longer does justice to tricks pigeons play
    Noted by passerby’s of such humble greys

    Then the tectonics of these oceans of mine
    Have drowned any clear path between me and you

    And If I could catch the words again and again
    By the opening of blinds between tongues
    I would feel as though the seas would much dryer now

    But even pigeons have mastered such silence
    And I’m not sure how much more to swallow
    To get to you to see what I need you to see
    Or how far for me to go to get you there
     
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    congratulations on the competition win!

    'Then the tectonics of these oceans of mine
    Have drowned any clear path between me and you'

    was my favorite line of the poem, well done again i enjoyed reading it.
    thanks
    Rachel
     
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