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    Sounds like a Ricky Martin song...

    Discussion in 'General Writing' started by shaylyn, Apr 26, 2012.

    I'm trying to describe the color of a person's skin as a lighter brown color (like of hawaiin decent) without saying "skin the color of mocha" which get's the words to Livin' La Vida Loca stuck in my head. Any ideas?
     
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    When I'm faced with nothing but stereotypes or clich├ęs, I swing for the fence. It's my story, why not throw some "wow" into your discourse. I'd try this.

    "The lead ran a gaze of over the lithe woman's skin. There was a comforting steamy warmth in her visage, like a creme brulee on a dreary afternoon. He could even imagine ladeling broth over her, if he could find that many boullion cubes..."

    I don't know, but I see a nice tan, glowing skin there. In fact, I'd like to meet that woman.
     
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    His/her complexion had the deep rich tones of an Islander bathed in sun.
     
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    Tourist, your reply made me smile :)
     
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    I do what I can, at least that's what I tell my probation officer.

    Seriously, we're supposed to be here to help each other write our stories. If that little blurb triggers your imagination to come up with the descriptive paragraph you need, then it's been my pleasure.
     

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