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  1. Jeredin

    Jeredin Member

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    Spelling out the pain . . .

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by Jeredin, May 9, 2009.

    What are some different ways of spelling out the sounds of pain, in dialog?

    I have a character who's just woke up with a neck-ache, and I'm having a hard time finding a good way to spell out his pain in dialog.

    I'm aware that I could just describe the groan, but the scene really asks for it to be in the dialog.

    Thanks for your suggestions. :D
     
  2. That Silly Welsh Guy

    That Silly Welsh Guy Senior Member

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    'Ouch', 'Ow', 'expletive/taboo word my insert achey body part here hurts' = those are the ways I'd choose to do it, but it obviously depends on whether or not you are comfortable with using taboo language in your piece.
     
  3. Sphi

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    For groaning I'd use "Aughh" or "Ughh" or "Ahh."
     
  4. Jeredin

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    Hurm . . .

    What do you think about "Uhnn"?
     
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    It usually sounds corny. Why do you think the scene calls for him to moan in dialog? Why can you narrate?

    Ahhrr, is another, but again I think it is corny. He groaned in pain, is better IMO. Or something like that.
     

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