I know this has been covered once before, but I'm super sorry I just need some advice. Now I know that swearing can scare off a publisher, and I've done my best to refrain from doing just that, going as far as rewriting scenes that I ended up swearing in. However, there's this one particular passage in there that I just can't figure out. (A little insight, my MC is on the run from an agency called the OSA, and is in the midst of trying to evade them. He is speaking to an agent that has a prominent role through the story) Do you know what kind of expenses you’ve caused?” She says to provoke me, still in close proximity. Her breath reeks of spearmint, and her ponytail sways behind her with every word. “Do you know how many incredible agents we’ve had to send after you? A simple teenager?” “Well there’s something you forgot about those ‘incredible agents.’” I try reminding her. I click open the knife in my hand and hold it tight. “Oh yeah?” She challenges. “What’s that?” “I fucking killed them.” I've done my best trying to rewrite it in a way that has the same intense feeling as the last sentence, but I can't get it. I've tried taking the word out all together but to me it falls flat. Other attempts at rewriting that part have failed me. My five test readers have all told me that they enjoyed the scene, and say it's fine. Am I shooting myself in the foot by keeping this or is it alright? Thanks in advance to anyone who gives advice!