I can't get my head around this, and it's all because of the confusion which arises from tense - Time of Events vs When the Story is Being Told, etc. In this passage there's an address to the reader which I feel calls for the following line to use past perfect, but I then switch to regular past for the rest of the passage. I'll highlight the switch, just to make it clear. Do I even need this past perfect? ----------------------- We'd been watching and tailing Hendrix for three days and had established a couple of things. One, that he banked the gym's takings on a Friday. And two, that Chet had been right about his minders never leaving his side. We could only assume he banked the money every Friday, of course, having only seen him do it the once, but our lack of funds meant lengthier surveillance wasn't an option. We had no choice but to strike the following Friday. At least that was the plan until a new development meant a complete rethink was needed. I'd pulled in and let a couple more cars slip in between us and Hendrix's black Merc before rejoining the flow of traffic. We followed them down a sidestreet where they stopped outside a pool hall. It was a fairly busy street, thankfully, and I tucked the car in behind a long line of parked cars some sixty yards from the building. Hendrix and his minder, both suited up, climbed from the car and strolled into the place.