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    The first piece of my novel.. thoughts?

    Discussion in 'General Writing' started by DLL333, Jan 23, 2013.

    This is the opener of my story... The premise is a little complicated, but basically there is a man who has the ability to tell stories, and literally pull the listener into them. There's a lot more to it, but I won't elaborate, at least not yet. Here is part of the opener, just all I have so far, which is a descriptive sequence of a man starting to get pulled in. Thoughts? Improvements?
     
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    Sorry mate but I think this should be in the novel section. Also I don't think you are allowed to post your own work until you have 20 posts, 2 critique's and have been a member for 14 days. I might be wrong (someone correct me if I am) since I am also quite new here too.

    Cheers Dave
     

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