Hi all, I'm trying to work on cleaning my writing, making it stronger etc. I know words like saw, noticed, believed etc are possible culprits. When do these words have their place in the writing? Are they acceptable when I'm in a POV and that character is seeing something? I use these words for things like Thomas noticed Clair staring into the trees. To me that seems ideal. My character is noticing what the other character is doing. If I make it Clair stared into trees it jumps into her POV which is bad bcause the rest of that paragraph is Thomas' POV. This next example is really tripping me up. It feels the first half is narrator, and the second half is Clair. The soldier saw Thomas glance past him, and turned slowly. (that was narrator) Clair saw the look on Thomas face. Resignation. He expected to die today. (and that was Clair). For consistency the whole thing should be changed to be in Clair's POV right? Is this better? Clair saw the look on Thomas face. Resignation. The soldiers eyes followed Thomas' gaze and he turned slowly. She closed her eyes and pulled the trigger. The idea I want in that paragraph is that Clair has never killed a human before and Thomas can see she's struggling so he doesn't expect that she will pull the trigger. Thanks heaps!