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    "They" pronoun in 3rd person

    Discussion in 'Word Mechanics' started by Fitzroy Zeph, Dec 1, 2014.

    I have a scene where my protagonist is with her friend and I find myself writing "they" this and "they" that, because what is happening is happening to both of them. I am trying to maintain POV in the protagonist's head. Is it okay to write "they" occasionally or should it be "she and her friend"? Or something else?
     
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    She and her friend actually makes me feel as though ive lost POV so id yse they and them, stay away from repetitions though. Just my thoughts on it.
     
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    "They" shouldn't be used for thoughts or feelings, only for actions. I would suggest sticking firmly to your POV character's POV. Random example:

    As they ran, the car exploded, sending shards of metal and glass toward them. They reached the shelter of the wall just in time--Jane felt the heat of the explosion on her back as she wheeled around the far side and fell to the damp, gritty ground. Judy was an instant behind her; she skidded to a stop, kicking up gravel into Jane's face.

    The heat, the damp, the grit, and the gravel in the face is all Jane's POV. Jane observes Judy's movement and her skidding to a stop. "They" ran and the shards are thrown toward "them" because those are facts rather than thoughts, feelings, or tactile sensations.
     

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