I've been told my series isn't quite Young Adult, since my characters are too young. In the first two books, the main characters were 12-14. In this entry, the third in the series, they're now 14-16. I'm introducing a new character - a 14 year old girl, who can look into a person's deepest fears and make them visible as a hallucination. The following chapter is just an outline, but I'm wondering - is it too dark for my 12-16+ target audience? Chapter 1: Home of the Witch Two men pull up to a run-down house. One of them says the place gives him the chills. The other tells him to "man-up". They cross the garden and enter the unlocked door. The two of them hear something, but see nothing. "Hello!" They turn and see a 14 year old girl wearing sun glasses - indoors and at night. Nestled in her hair is a small cat. The nervous one asks if she followed them in - she says she lives here. The other man says "not for much longer." He pulls a gun, but she calmly pushes the barrel to one side and says it isn't loaded. "Really?" he asks. He points it at the ceiling and pulls the trigger - it clicks. Confused, he checks the magazine - empty! She laughs at him. The other asks why she's wearing sun glasses. She lifts the glasses to reveal dull, almost lifeless eyes. The confident man says she won't see what he's about to do to her, but she catches his hand. He smiles awkwardly. The nervous one says they don't have time for this; the boss is looking for a new hide-out. The confident one tells the other to wait in the van. The girl says the confident one is sick - Mr nervous doesn't want to catch what he's got. The confident one says "What's the diagnosis, nurse?" He smiles the whole time. The girl says "I don't know what it's called, but you're sick enough to imagine this." In the blink of an eye, her fingernails become foot-long razors, her hair turns to fire and she grows to over 8 feet tall with glowing red eyes and vicious looking teeth. The nervous one flees. The confident one tries to follow, but finds his hand caught in her iron grip. "Feeding time, Muffin," she says, before the cat leaps from her hair, turning into a lioness as it lands behind the quivering man. He begs for his life, but she says, "Leave this place, and tell your boss he's not welcome." She releases him and he escapes, barely an inch ahead of the lioness. The van screeches away as the girl approaches the door. "You forgot your gun," she laughs. The cat looks up and leaps onto her mistress' lowered hand, climbs up her arm and nestles in her hair. "Good Muffin," she says softly as the cat purrs contently in her hair. Is the confident man too creepy? Is the hallucination too demonic? It's revealed in a later chapter that the gun was loaded (someone asks about the hole in the ceiling). Also her own eyes and ears don't work, but she can experience almost all of the senses of most other people and animals nearby, which is why she keeps the cat in her hair. She can also manipulate what others experience, but if there's nobody in range she's effectively deaf and blind.