Okay, I have been told I am pretty good at writing by other writers. However, considering it has been an age of the world since I last step foot in an English class, I lack a good deal of the vocabulary to explain writing issues. Let me give an example of the kind of sentences I keep writing over and over: "Jill had heard there were fire beasts in the forests. She never took those stories seriously, and laughed at the notion as she strolled through the glade. Suddenly, she turned her eyes at a movement in the distance. Her jaw fell open as she saw the beast in the distance. She paused, hoping it hadn't seen her..." She did this, she did that, ah! My writing reads like a shopping list of what the character does. I have been trying to change things up a bit and have other characters do something and start the sentence with them doing an action. Also, I have been trying to make non-humans the ones doing the action. Example: "Dust exploded into the air." "A bell tolled in the distance." But still, I have way to many "she does this, she does that." Is there a term for that kind of sentence? Also, anyone else have a similar issue with their prose?