Does this sound correct: "The pure essence of what holds the human embodiment together slowly started to drift out the core of her palm." The human embodiment....? Quite unsure if I'm simply overthinking it or not. Had several deputes with others and they are unsure now as well. Sorry for the disturbance, and thanks.
Hi Zion H, welcome to the forum. My understanding of human embodiment is to give human form to something that doesn't have it, so if the being you are talking about is alien but in human form, it's probably OK. If you are talking about a human then it probably needs a re-think.
It sounds a mouthful and forces one to wade through with a thinking cap on. Sorry. I've got my waders and cap on though. Let's see. Pure essence = quintessence Holding embodiment = encapsulation Slowly started = emerged core of palm = just palm maybe? So... What encapsulated human quintessence, emerged from her palm. How's that?
It does sound a bit of a mouth full. To myself started to drift, could possibly just be drifted. Also, when I think of drifting I have an image in my head of that being a slow activity, so I don't need to be told it's "slowly" drifting. And as @SethLoki has already mentioned I'd say just having palm reads better. My stab. . . The pure essence of what embodies a human drifted from her palm.
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