Well basically, when I'm writing my stories, it feels like I use 'as' way too much. I'll give a line of dialogue and then go on to say something along the lines of '....he said, as he looked past the sweltering sun and into the eyes of the man he feared most.' But aside from that, it also feels like I use 'as' way too much as a medium through which I can string imagery or description into the progression of the narrative. Here's an 2 example paragraphs from a story I've been working on for the past week. It's a mix of dialogue and imagery in a fairly important scene. Of course it's in the middle of a story no one has read yet, so just get over the fact that you won't know what's happening. Do I use 'as' too much here? ' “Not too excited to meet Him are you? Well, I can understand and respect that. I'm dreading Saturday. But at least we have the day off then, you have the possibility of meeting with Him hanging over all your days events and actions. “Scarlett said as she glanced out the window behind Desmond. The Citadel towered over everything as it began to grow larger and larger in the presence of the speeding Relay Tram. Scarlett looked back at Desmond as he sat in rapt fascination at what was unfolding before him. “I hope this day isn’t too stressful for you Dez. But everyone I have spoken to about the subject swears of the power of His words. They say honesty with yourself and with Him is key. I....I don’t know if I can do that…” She said as she looked downward to her small soft hands. “No matter what you think of me, just know it’s hard for me to be what I appear to be to you and everyone else. I cannot even be honest with myself when I’m around others. I fear they will see what I hide as a weakness. That they will focus on my faults and tear up everything I have worked so hard to accomplish…” Scarlett’s voice descended into a slight whimper as Desmond could see tears forming at the corners of her blue eyes. His first instinct was to slowly bring his hand to her face and take away the lone teardrop. As he began to lift his hand, the Relay Tram began to decelerate “Arrival into three, two, one.” Spoke the hollow feminine voice as the Tram gently arrived at Detritus Academy. Desmond had just witnessed something he had never seen in Scarlett. Something, he thought, no one had ever seen, but something she had to think about and contend with at every turn. Is there more to Scarlett? Is there something I could understand? Something I could relate to? Something I could even love? Desmond looked out the window beside him and saw that cadets were already filling out of the Tram and going about their ways. By the time Desmond spun around to face Scarlett, she was gone. ' *mind you, this is an example in which I think I use it too often. Is this okay? or should I find alternative ways to string dialogue and imagery into the narrative? Some authors I enjoy seem to use it all the time and I still enjoy their writing. But there are others that don't use nearly as often and I like their writing just as well. Is there a strict rule for this? or is this one of those things that comes from a writers' own writing style?