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    Wanted: Love cliche!

    Discussion in 'General Writing' started by Tesoro, Mar 2, 2011.

    I need some kind of cliche about love preferably starting with "we are like...." or "you are my..." that hopefully wont sound too much like a harlekin-novel. do you have any suggestions? its something one person close to the MC says in the beginning which im going to use as a gimmic, it is a phrase that will come back in the climax, making the MC take a tough decition that had to be made for the sake of her own good. and i just cant come up with one. It doesnt matter that im not writing in english because most english cliches/proverbs/quotes can be directly translated into my languge (and often are).
     
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    You are my density.
    hahaha sorry. Great movie line, but probably not what you're looking for.

    You are my life. That's what I say to my husband, anyway. :)
    You are my reason for being.
    You are the love of my life.
    You are my other half.

    We are like two peas in a pod.
    We are like two turtle doves.

    It really all depends on what YOU are looking for. How serious a comment this person is making to the MC - or if it's said jokingly. Hope I helped in some way. :) Good luck.
     
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    no its meant to be serious, as an attempt to make the MC stay... instead it rings a totally different bell in her head making her remember something somebody else said in her past and how that ended (disastrously) which makes her realize that she's on the same track as that friend was once, by not wanting to realize this person is actually bad for her and the whole relationship is destructive. thats why i need a phrase people actually say from time to time when they try to describe a relationship w someone.
     
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    Lol. which movie was that in? :D
     
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    Hi,

    You're the air that I breath. (The Hollies).
    You complete me.

    Cheers.
     
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    You are everything to me
    or alternatively, you are my everything (which sounds a bit more cliche and over dramatic imo)
     
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    these are all good ones, this person is being a little possessive, so i think those last two would be suiting. but if anyone else have suggestions please write them too. you can never have to many to choose from ;) i sort of have something on my mind that i cannot seem to put words on, i cant remember what it is, but i know it must be out there somewhere...
     
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    You are my sunshines, my only sunshine.
    You make me happy... :)

    Actually, I think that is from a song I heard.
     
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    ...when skies are grey...
    I love that song! :))
     
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    haha yes, that was a good line. Back to the Future. :)

    And I agree with "You are everything to me" sounding best.

    Saying "You are my everything" sounds a little too poetic, and when you are talking to someone else, most people don't go for the poetic way to say things; it sounds more like a line from an actor in a pathetic movie that I wouldn't get past the first 5 minutes of.
     
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    I agree. And this person isnt very poetic ;)
    Actually sometimes im a little torn about how much to use the way people really say things (as in vocabulary and more of language as it is being used when talking opposite to writing) or if to use the correct way of saying things with the risk it might sound less authentic... its a balance... i almost never use slang (maybe only once or so to give a picture of what kind of person a character is but no unappropriate words ;) ) and i try to avoid so called bad words but sometimes its hard because there are people who tend to use them a lot when they speak and how do you write about them when you have to auto-censuring (is that the word for it?) yourself while writing the dialogue??
     
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    Back to the future.
     
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    Hmm..I think I understand what you're trying to do. You want something that can be said both lovingly and also be taken as having a sinister connotation. How about "You're the reason..for all of this." The positive is what the person points to (either physically or abstractly, as in a new life, be it that he's changed a great deal for the other person, or material wealth he's either working his butt off for or has already worked his butt off for) and the sinister version is that she's the reason that something terrible happened, like the blame is being laid at her feet.. The entire phrase can be used in both instances, then truncated to just "you're the reason" and that's what she picks up on..
     
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    "You mean everything to me."

    Less overdramatic while saying the same thing.
     
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    thanks to both of you. I think you got my idea, something can be said lovingly but also work like an alarmclock to someone who's heard that before in a totally different context.
     
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    Such phrase to be really gripping requires a bit more context. You could link to wellknown couples, like Bonnie & Clyde or Ivanhoe & Guinnevere.
    I was first thinking smth like "We are Castor and Pollux" or "We are Scylla and Charybdis", but if you need a double meaning, I will have to think a bit further. The glass is half full or half empty kinda thing may also be useful.
     
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    I love it in Bonnie & Clyde when he slowly says, 'You're a knockout.'
     
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    the only glove for my hand is you ?
     
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    that was a sweet one, i have never heard that before. :)
     
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    i never ever use cliches ' the only glove for my hand is you ?' is an example of how i make my own cliches up
     

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