WF's 10th Anniversary Discussion Thread

Discussion in '10th Anniversary Contest' started by Wreybies, Jun 16, 2016.

  1. matwoolf
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    [Mat misses joke]

    ...I didn't...I kind of knew it was someone...I knew...you...but I was working at speed. I do have to watch out for my anti regarding 'dead father' writes, 'childbirth' writes, probably a couple of other things I get shirty about. Anything written by @123456789 I try and tear huge lumps out of his metropolitan introspection, heh heh, heh heh heh.
     
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    Anyone else want to fess up to which one was theirs?
    I'll admit to writing Mapleberry.

    And thanks to all who complimented it.
     
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    I guessed it was yours. You have a cool style, and great sense of humour.

    Anyone want to guess mine? I'll give you a clue it featured the number ten in it....
     
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    Was it Ten Cats? I hope it was ten cats...
     
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    Or Ten Pedophiles, that was...literary..
     
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    f**k it, I'm done with waiting, Colours of New Technology was mine, i know at this point I've not done enough to win, but I'm happy, and that's all i care about
     
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    Wait till the science boys get on it. You shall wear a crown, @ChaosReigns
     
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    well I'm surprised it wasn't more obvious it was mine, given that I've said that I'm currently studying a Computer Science and Artificial Intelligence degree lol
     
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    I read each of them as they were posted. I can't remember any of the details enough to figure out which one was yours.
     
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    I'll own up to Guides on Parade. My first effort at writing for a competition and really enjoyed being part of it.
     
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    I've gotta admit to being slightly embarrassed to be the only one who used every last allowed word.

    At the end, I was rewording things to pull a word out so I could add one elsewhere.
    I think it goes back to my Montessori days. The teacher would never let me turn in a picture with white on my paper.
    "You need to fill in the whole picture."
    "I don't want to. My drawings suck."
    "Don't say suck, dear."
    (Sticks up middle finger when she turns around.)
     
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    Didn't stop me reading every word though :)
     
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    Life, Death and the Big, White Bull is mine.

    My first draft came in around 11,000-ish. I chopped it back to seven, then took it down to 3,000-ish in the final draft. It still needed work in the way of embellishment but I was becoming more chicken shit about posting it as time went on. I settled. The reason I went uncharacteristically word light was simply to see if I could. I'm generally a bit long-winded. ;)
     
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    Actually, I owe @doggiedude a thank you. I had several false starts on my entry (all different takes on ten) but they weren't going anywhere. in fact I was feeling hopeless about the whole thing (I was also anxious about Brexit, and couldn't really concentrate). I had pretty much given up. Then I read your blog, Doggiedude, (so I had some clues to identify your story) and you wrote about the structure of pulp fiction short stories and I thought "I'll have another go" (there is me thinking with too many "quotation marks" again) so a few days before the deadline I used one of the cards from tarot that google had thrown up in my searches... and Ten of Swords slowly crept out of my head. It was really shit to start with, but it seems I managed to make a reasonable stab at editing into something some kind people liked.

    My head and my heart (but no other organ, I promise you) swelled when I read @matwoolf's kind words on my story. I thank you kind sir.

    Whoever wins, this has been really enjoyable. Hope everyone will be participating in the short story and flash fiction contests when they come back :)
     
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    It's feedback...otherwise writers are posting into the ether. With the bi-weekly competitions, is my point.

    I understand other posters saying 'nothing was up to my standard of reading' - but I don't really care about that.

    I do care that we take [contest] writes, work on them and submit to success...and not rest on chat.
     
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    I wondered about yours. There were parts where I felt things were missing & something had been skipped. Maybe you edited too far? :) (I did like it though.)
     
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    Glad I could help. Now I gotta go back & re-read Ten of Swords
     
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    You could be right. There are definitely a few dodgy transitions that need looking at. Deep scene setting is my usual schtick, but I made a conscious decision to go with brevity, so a lot of my descriptions are purposely scaled way back. Given more time, I would have finessed the hack 'n slash but I needed more stewing time than the comp afforded to look at what I'd written objectively. ;)
     
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    Okay ... I re-read Ten of Swords. I'm not sure how I skipped commenting on it earlier. Yes, it was very funny in places. The obvious breaks in police procedure could be forgiven since it was written as a farce. (I hope.)
    Had a similar feel to the movie Airplane.
    Surely you can't be serious?
    I am serious, and don't call me Shirley.
     
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    I am a fan of brevity. I don't think you need more words (necessarily) but you just need to spend more time editing. I loved your story. I think the beginning needs to be stronger. You must try to get this published. :)
     
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    Mat, you know I digged yours. I swear, there was a brief moment I was so awed, that I shouted to my posse (I bet my posse is bigger than yours) "Matwoolf is going to win again!" -that was before I read the story about the naked and ball-gagged girl tied up to a tree and getting eaten by flies.

    I even composed a short critique in my head. Cute. Wondrous prose style, as usual. Although, let's face it, porn and raunchy sex, especially as an opening, is about as cliche as any Friends episode. Then again, the whole debauchery act seemed to work well enough for some of the other entrees...
     
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    I had to scramble to meet the deadline. Where I use the internet closes at five ... speaking of which I practically have to leave right now. And I came up with a story idea two days before the contest ended.
    :rolleyes:
    About my usual routine. Put it off until the last minute then ... whammo. I'd make an excellent bomb defuser.
    I wish I had more time to fix mine up. Ah well. I made a deadline, wrote a story in two days, entered a contest. As far as I'm concerned a win in and of itself.
    Hours to go...
    Good luck all!
     
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    Does that mean - Only Ten was yours?
     
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    Thanks @BruceA. Not touching it for at least a month though... give it time to settle.
     
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    Yes, it was not supposed to be a police procedural! To be honest it was a lot sillier to begin with. I think because I didn't really believe in it I made it stupid, which I then tried to change later into funny. I wrote it without a clear plan in my head (normal for me) so edited a lot. But I did have the general structure you gave in your blog in my head (as I remember it : trouble, more trouble, so much trouble no way out, then get him out of trouble).
     
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