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    Contest Winner! Winner of Poetry Contest #247 - canweplease

    Discussion in 'Bi-Weekly Poetry Contest' started by thirdwind, Jul 20, 2014.

    Congratulations to @canweplease for winning this poetry contest! You can read the winning poem below. I'll also tag @Wreybies so that he knows to give you your medal. :agreed:

    canweplease - please send me your suggestion for the theme of the next poetry contest. If I don't hear from you by the end of the day, I'll use your suggestion next time and use one of the themes in the suggestions thread instead.



    "Lets not talk about this"
    by canweplease

    There’s nothing so insignificant
    As the little bits not eaten at breakfast
    Like we were all mice dancing around
    In masks and clothes we couldn't understand…
    Until red fish with wisdom and gills
    Taught us all to be brave and not cry
    At the dentist.


    I really want to learn, I really need to know
    How to be hurt and never show that we really don’t-
    Trust that damn red fish.
    I need to leave
    I need to leave
    I need to get out!
    LET ME OUT!
    The glass and walls shouldn't be all around me because
    These walls… they suck! But he keeps saying
    Things like “the war is over” and “I love you”.
    I don’t think it’s true, I don’t think it’s true at all,
    But then I remember that it doesn't matter
    Because I like how he holds me… it’s nice
    Nicer than being alone.


    And then, above a city made of spaghetti and bad plots
    I'm taken to the top of something and I stare.
    An idol to the god of pig, a sad mask and some-
    Audiences clapping like they liked it.
    It feels like the dentist and I'm crying tears
    To make the spaghetti soft so that it’s ready for dinner.
    And the bad plots are never over
    In the city that breaks us all.
     
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    Congrats! :agreed:
     
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    Nice work!
     
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    thanks! had a busy week and forgot to check until now, and of course I won't name them but some of the others were very good! i enjoyed them all!
     
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    Lewdog Come ova here and give me kisses! Supporter Contributor

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    Congrats, now you'll have to go to your local coffee house and read your award winning poem to a crowd. :pop:
     

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