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    Winner Of The Weekly Poetry Contest (08)

    Discussion in 'Bi-Weekly Poetry Contest Archives' started by Raven, Jun 13, 2007.

    Onoria Westhrop



    Jack, King and Queen.


    She hears the spiccato and marcato of the strings,
    Quivering strings,
    As the band moves to a tango and the ritual begins,
    The champagne stars prick lightly
    against an unfamiliar tongue,
    while Jack’s left hand holds her tightly
    her heart palpitating slightly
    as they swirl into the throng.
    Stepping left, back, left, with a sudden ache of heat,
    stepping left, back, left, right, front, right, repeat
    flushing with a sudden ache of heat.

    She sees glowing chandeliers in balloons,
    Green balloons!
    As the band begins a number and a moody singer croons,
    to the melody reprising
    in a cresting machicotage
    with the champagne bubbles rising,
    Jack stumbles once, disguising
    kissing down décolletage,
    her heart beats, beats, beats, to the rhythm of the tease,
    her heart beats, beats, beats, please don’t, please..
    don’t, please don’t, do it, please.

    She joins them at the table, playing hands,
    playing hands,
    as the night draws on to morning and the band slowly disbands,
    while her husband is guffawing,
    slapping cards upon the baize,
    her foot surely exploring,
    Jack is pressing and imploring,
    beneath the gambler’s smoky haze,
    hit, stick, hit, stick, - you have, sex, ten, sixteen,
    hit, stick, hit, stick, what is wagered is unseen
    seven, eight, nine, ten, Jack, King, and Queen.
    two, three, six, eight, Jack, King and Queen.



    © "Onoria Westhrop" - 2007
     
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    Well done, a worthy rival and ultimate winner! We'll spar again I don't doubt!
     
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    Very nice, Miss Westthrop. Keep it up ... or down ... or however you keep it. :)
     
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    Well done a marvellous piece you have written indeed.
    Congradulations Onoria.

    ~Torana
     
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    Well done indeed, Onoria! Even a poetry neo like myself can recognize the beauty in this offering.

    Lovely imagery.
     
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    congrats Onoria, an excellent peice. i thoroughly enjoyed reaidng it :)
    Heather
     
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    Congratulation, I gotta say the best poem won.
     
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    Thanks all, I did have my qualms about some of the poncey words, but will gladly wear the crown for a week! I hope my usurper writes something worthy of the title.
    Champ-for-a-day-Onoria.
     
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    Well Done
     
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