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    Winning Poem From Poetry Contest (14)

    Discussion in 'Bi-Weekly Poetry Contest Archives' started by Raven, Aug 5, 2007.

    ~Heather

    Heaven

    Clouds that stretch so peaceful and pink,
    Sun shining so bright it makes you blink,
    Everything clam, not a single care,
    Always quite and always bare,
    Yet every second through out the day,
    There’s laughter and giggles and so much to say,
    It’s never quite yet never loud,
    When you’re high above the wondrous cloud,
    The loved ones the have passed away,
    Once came here and are still today,
    Heaven is were I’m talking about,
    Such a peaceful place I have no doubt,
    And when you too have passed away,
    You will go there and want to stay.
     
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    Well well done Heather, I'll be back to challenge for the next one and I'm looking forward to it already.
     
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    thank you my darling, and i am looking forward to reading your next entry. :)
     
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    Congrats. Pretty good, with the exception of the fact that there are six spelling mistakes and that it's very cliché. Whatever. Hate me if you want. Someone had to say it. I'm not saying it was bad. It wasn't at all. A nice read, actually. But do I think this deserved to win? Not really. I'm a blatantly honest person.
     
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    Beautifully done, Heather.

    That's two wins in a row. You're going to make a habit of this, aren't you?

    Congratulations!
     
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    i hope so Cogito, thanks. :p

    and i am sorry that you feel that way BayWriter, and thanks for pointing outt he mistakes, i never noticed them before. and i know it is very cliche, and to be honest never even thought i would win with it, i just entered it for more personal reasons rather than to win this week, but i am really glad i did and that people liked it. thanks anyway for the congrats. :)

    Heather
     
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    well done Heather and congradulations sweety. Well done to all who entered the competition they were all wonderful poems. Be proud!

    Torana
     
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    I totally enjoyed this poem I even voted for this poem. As for spelling errors this was entered into a contest so i think unless its posted up for critique then we can ignore the spelling issues and enjoy the poem. The poem that won regardless of spelling errors.


    Well written Heather a deserving win. ;) :)






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    thanks Torana and Hulls, i am glad that you liked it so much. :D and as Torana said, all the other enteries were amazing! :)
    thanks
    Heather
     
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    What spelling mistakes. I couldn't see any.

    Good poem by the way heather
     
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    There you go. Some of the words may be spelled right, but they aren't the right words. Therefore, it is not spelled the way it should be.
     
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    thanks for pointing the out Bay, although i am not sure how through out is spelt incorrectly. must just be me. thanks again everyone anyway. :)
    Heather
     
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    Should be:

    Calm
    Quiet
    Throughout
    Quiet
    That
    Where
     
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    Baywriter. I think its safe to say you have kindly made your point.

    Can we now please move away from this.



    Heather I enjoyed reading your poem dispite the spelling errors. And i think it deserved the win.





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    They asked. I answered. Simple as that. I'm not trying to be rude. Just stating my opinion, and I'm sorry it isn't what you all want to hear. But this is exactly why I think we need a different way of judging contests.
     
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    Sorry, being new here and all, but how are they currently judged?

    It looks to me like people vote, which is - to my mind - probably the best way. I always think that the core essence of writing is the mood, the emotion. Content always beats spelling and grammar. Anyone can correct great content; poor content is poor, no matter what the editing has achieved!

    Or is it not done that way?
     
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    It is done that way, but it's biased. People are going to vote for themselves and their friends, or the person who has the most votes at the time. That's why I don't like the system, despite the fact that I do like having a say in the way the polls go.

    As far as content goes, that may be true... But... Never mind. I am done being rude. People will get mad at me if I give my honest opinion, so why bother?
     
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    Yeah, but that's how the world works. I won't buy books by certain writers because I think they're jumped up little twats; I also forgive the sins of certain writers because of who they are.

    I might enter one of these contests - it'll save someone else coming last!
     
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    Heather this was a great poem. Your win is deserved and I do not think it was because of your friends voting for you, it is because it was great writing. well done


    Baywriter- you said
    *They asked. I answered. Simple as that. I'm not trying to be rude. Just stating my opinion, and I'm sorry it isn't what you all want to here. But this is exactly why I think we need a different way of judging contests.*

    Did you happen to notice you made a spelling mistake?
    *here* should be *hear*
    but do you think we care? it is about what you are writing not necessarily the mistakes you have made.
     
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    i can assure you that i did not vote for myself, and i do not think i got any extra votes because of my friends. is it me winning that set of the whole "lets change the voting sytem" hoopla, because i hope not. and yes, thank-you for pointing out all of my spelling mistakes, i will try to remember to spell correctly in future, and yes, i should have noticed them, especially if it was to be entered in a contest, but i didn't, it's over now, so can we get over it. thanks again everyone who voted for me and has congratulated me, and my commiserations to those who unfortunalty did not win.
    Heather
     
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    Wow. Talk about spiteful. Fine. You know what I think? The poem was too cliché. It's like something I've read a thousand times before. Anyone could've written something exactly like it. There. Not JUST about spelling. I think Cogito should've won, but whatever.

    Anyway, I am sorry if you find it rude, and I'm sorry I made a mistake. Whatever. Let's drop it.

    Heather, I'm sorry if I offended you. I'm just saying what I believe. Also, you winning did not start that. I had been thinking about that for a while.
     
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    Can we all just calm down?

    Now, I don't think it's fair any of you are going after Baywriter. She simply stated her opinions, and her findings in the poem. Okay? She has a right to her opinion, and if she thinks that something is wrong with the poem, or how it's judged, then she has a right to say it. So don't go off on her because of her opinions, because I know she wouldn't do that to any of you.

    Alright? So can we all just drop this and be friends again? Don't let one poem scare away one member and piss off many more.
     
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    no, i'm not offended, it was your opinion, thats all. and i am glad to hear me winning did not start it all. :)
     
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    I do feel bad, though. I know I probably should've kept it to myself. Sorry to all I offended. But if anyone else still has issues, take it up with me in a PM. We don't need to keep wrecking this topic.
     
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    sorry baywriter, didn't mean to be so rude. I must have missed breakfast or something, it didn't feel so rude when I wrote it. LOL. I guess just like you I was trying to make a point. We area ll entitled to our opinions, and I hope that my coment does not sway you from doing so in the future.

    Did I mention Heather that your piece was great? Cause it was darlin!
     
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