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    Winning Poem from The Weekly Poetry Contest (03)

    Discussion in 'Bi-Weekly Poetry Contest Archives' started by Raven, May 7, 2007.

    Domoviye



    "Welcome To The Alley"



    Welcome to the alley mister.
    If you've got cash, I'm ready,
    If you like younger, here's my sister.
    Just ignore Screaming Eddie.

    Oh, you're here to stay.
    Give me some candy, I'll show you around.
    Cheap drugs are that way.
    Don't ask for freebies, they'll beat you down.

    Here are the hookers, and crack whores.
    Give us presents, we'll treat you nice.
    Hope you like doing it in the great outdoors.
    Just make sure you meet our price.

    The dumpsters always have food.
    Wait until the Grunges are gone,
    They'll kill you if they're in a bad mood.
    Best to check it at dawn.

    Ignore the old folk,
    They've got nothing but booze.
    That **** will make you choke,
    But you can steal it while they snooze.

    Why am I here?
    Why should I tell you?
    I'll tell, if you give me your beer.
    This tastes like crap, but it will do.

    Daddy didn't like Mommy,
    She didn't give him any thrills.
    He told me to look after his salami.
    So I started taking Mommy's pills.

    Little Susie joined in Daddy's fun.
    Mommy started missing more pills.
    I decided it was time to run.
    Thought we'd head for Beverly Hills.

    Instead we ended up here,
    Asshole of the city.
    Been here for over a year,
    Selling our little clitty.

    You got a five?
    It's been a slow night,
    It will keep you feeling alive.
    Follow me, I'll make you feel alright.
     
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    Congradulations Domoviye, you wrote a truely wonderful piece and I really enjoyed reading it. :)

    Thankyou for sharing and congradulations again.

    ~Torana
     
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    This where I must pretend that everything is hunky-dory and that I am so happy that you won. Where I must display my savoir-fair by maintaining that the failure of my efforts means naught and that it is not the winning or losing that matters, but the playing of the game.

    Congratulations Domoviye may a thousand demons not gnaw at your bowels until next Tuesday week.

    What..? Me..? Bitter..?:rolleyes:
     
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    Thank you all for voting for me, and for putting up worthy competition.

    Spartan thats not much of a curse. I get that whenever I eat my sister-in-laws cooking.
    Please come up with something original next time.;)

    Edit: if people want to critique this poem, go ahead, I'd appreciate the advise.
     
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    congarts Domoviye, an excellent poem, not that everon elses weren't brilliant also.
    well done,
    Heather
     
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    congrats domoviye

    a deserving win

    coral
     
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    That, has got to be the cutest, fluffiest bunny thing I have ever read. I nearly fell off the chair laughing! Thankyou so much for that.:D :D.

    Well done Domoviye. An extremely good poem and well deserving of the cup (there is a cup that gets passed around, isn't there? ..... maybe a medal? No? Oh dear:( Never mind.)
     
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    Damn the apples...!!

    But yeah, it is quite well-written. Congrats Domoviye.
     
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    I liked it too.
     
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    Winner because of its stand alone qualities - caught the attention and hence the votes. Well done!
     
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    Once more thanks everyone, its really appreciated.
     
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