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    Writers Trinity 2 ~ Winner

    Discussion in 'Bi-Weekly Poetry Contest Archives' started by Torana, May 9, 2008.

    Gannon ~ Ambivalence

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    With quivering lip and trembling thigh,
    once acquainted lovers meet
    under a conspiring sky.

    Accompanied by a grin and a gasp
    with astonishing ease comes
    the release of a then tricky clasp.

    A grasping at catches and a clutching of hair
    the past’s taboo forgotten:
    experienced desire laid bare.

    How familiar the ground,
    sure footing and a steady hand over
    each undulating, swollen mound.

    The mute dance of before replaced by bliss.
    Now sweating satisfaction:
    then, but a tender kiss.
     
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    Congratulations Gannon! I enjoyed your poem. The fourth stanza sort of threw me off in flow but it's a very good poem.
     
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    Thanks for the votes people but I feel bad as I don't really rate my entry and think Gloom Kitty was robbed. And sweetpea - couldn't agree more the rhythm is all over the place, not just in stanza four, and not I think in a good way. Nevertheless it's always nice to receive votes. And congratulations to all the entries - some good work by all! :)
     
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    Gratz Gannon, it was a great piece :-D
     
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    I suck. :mad:

    You did a good job though.

    You inspires me. :)
     
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    Congrats Gannon....kool poem there......;)
     
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