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    Writing Styles

    Discussion in 'General Writing' started by NaZ, May 12, 2008.

    Please give me your opinion about this, what do you think is better?

    For a beginner like me, I've started writing for 1 year only, and I wonder, if it's better on a third-person's point of view, like.

    "To hell with death" Sarah said, her eyes flickering with rage.
    The girl raised her sword, ready to strike, the crimson blood from her past victims leaking onto her opponent.

    I nodded, my hand on the hilt of the sword, I unsheathed it and sent it in one vicious arc, ready to cut open whatever it was going to strike, it's steel glistening in the moon, about to be drenched in blood.


    Should it be My Point of View? Which is better for a beginner, a third person point of view? Or my Point of View, because I seem to describe my surroundings better if it is the point of view of the main character, please give me your opinions so I can improve my writing.
     
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    It doesn't matter if you're a beginner or not when it comes to third or first person P.O.V. Just write what you feel is most comfortable. Writing is trial and error, whenever you find your strong point, keep it going and you'll know which suits you better.
     
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    Most established, and even non-established writers who feel they have some sort of insight into the publishing business will tell you that third person is the way to go. They try to convince beginner's that third person is easier, and truthfully, it is. BUT, in the end, the story is yours to write, and if writing in a first person point of view feels right to you, then who is anyone else to dictate how YOUR story should be written?

    In my opinion, if you've only been writing a year, stick with third person for now. First person is a tricky tense, and causes even established writers endless drags of agony. But again, it's your story to tell, and if you feel first person will give depth to your story, go for it.
     
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    I like your first person version better, becauase the prose is less opaque (or as some call it, 'purple prose'). But really, you could write that just as easily in third person by changing 'I' to 'she'. I don't think it's POV that's your problem, so go with whichever seems to work when you sit down to write.
     
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    Neither perspective is better or worse. It's totally up to your preference. Though I find it's better to go first person if I'm going to be having a lot of input from the main character. But if you want to focus on the environment, you'd probably be better off going third person, as first person is all about what the character notices personally. You can't very well describe something that the character isn't aware of, and it would not be very fitting if the character noticed the shape of a cloud if his/her loved one is in danger.

    That's what I think, but it's not about what I think. Do what seems right to you.
     
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    Ah, I see where you guys are coming from here, I see now, I think I'll stick with my point of view, as I am more comfortable with it.
     
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    With first person, you will find yourself in a forest of "I"s. Using third person gives a lot more flexibility with the wording. Also, if you are in first person mode and need to switch to a different perspective, it tends to be more obvious to the reader.

    The main reason for using first person is to stay closer to the character's thoughts. Personally, I prefer to show the character's thoughts and feelings indirectly, through actions, rather than directly, but you can even write internal dialogue in third person, if you really wish to:
    As others say, it's largely a matter of individual choice. My preference is to use third person unless I have a good reason not to.
     
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    I always use third person...I just like the way the thoughts flow out on paper, I reads better and makes more sense to me.

    It is widely open to preference however, so just play with the different P.O.V.'s and decide which one works best for you.
     
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    A good reason for writing in first person would be if the main character was a detective *shrugs*
     
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    Thank you for your time, I've found out what was better to use, thanks.
     
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    i agree with in pieces and cog on this... they've said all i would have...

    hugs, maia
     
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    As a reader I avoid first person with a passion unless it's a short story or it gets boring. I can't quite explaining it but in first peson I get a feeling I am being told something and in third I am shown. I like to be shown and not have to do all the brain work behind the story.

    Then again that is what I read for a daily staple, I have a friend who will not read anything that isn't in first person. So it's a taste.

    There are some stories that work better with one or another, I always thought detective and ghosts stories are better in first. Fantasy and raw horror in third. When something is spooky or a puzzle, it's fun to be that guy. When someones insides are slowly being removed, I don't want to be that close to that guy. if that makes sense.
     

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