Hello all, as my first real contribution to this board, I'd like your feedback on the main character of (what I hope will be) my debut project. I will admit I'm a total noob when it comes to stuff like this, and I'm lazy as well: the character is based largely off myself and is an embodiment of some of the thoughts I'd never say. I hope people don't think it's cliche or too "Holden Caulfield" but I would understand if you'd think that and won't hold it against you. First, a little background on the setting and plot: Our courageous hero (not really, he's just a spiteful and misanthropic teenage white boy) has found himself in a situation in which virutally every aspect of his life is beyond his control. His emotionally abusive, bitchy and manipulative mother has tricked him and lied about him to a hospital social worker, causing him to be placed in a lockup facility for juvenile delinquents. It opens with him being strapped to a stretcher. As a general rule, adult authority figures in this novel are portrayed as sadistic, narcissistic, one-sided and hell-bent on upholidng the institutions of authority. With a minute few notable exceptions. The primary aim of this project is to be a vicious satire against the mental health system, and, by extension, all humanity. He himself is named Ian Wright (the name itself is a pun, and I'm open to finding a better, less crude and / or richly symbolic one) and has Asperger's syndrome. He enjoys a lot of extreme metal music and violent video games, and while he doesn't have a lot of friends back home. Underneath, he's a complete sentimental, sensitive softie. (Avoid alteration always.) He's pretty much the black sheep of his hometown, but nonetheless (as I like to put it) a black sheep clutching a torch in his hoof (don't ask me how that would work). He's the embodiment of an ideal that I find is quite noble, in my opinion at least: the oppressed and invalidated finding people to relate and share their experience with to in extraordinarily oppressive and invalidating circumstances. Unlike the assumed perception of most with Asperger's syndrome he has a witty command of language, and feels emotions quite strongly. He feels incredibly out of place at the facility, even more so than usual. He's also filled with lots of nostalgic despondency for his early childhood, which he remembers vividly. Ultimately, after he is discharged, he reaches out to the two friends he made in juvie and (it's alluded that) they start a band. I would greatly appreciate any advice you can give me on how to further develop this character and add depth to him. I already have a lot going on with his thoughts and dialogue, but would like some more symbolism to add to him. Cheers, and stay brutal.