Starting? Tod's; payment in faery gold.

By Drake GreenWood · Dec 30, 2018 · ·
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  1. Okay.. I had three section that were okay and knew if i was going to continue this way.. I needed to insert a section between section one and two.

    The thing is in this fantasy world what you see is Not Always what you get.
    there are the heroes.. and the mundanes.

    Tod the Protagonist is a perfectly normal mercenary armsman style hero that has been hired to act as watch commander of a small settlements watch of four men. they didn't have a formal watch before a family disappeared.

    Thommie is a mischievous boy that Tod drafted, to become and apprentice officer/cadet, figuring that he would know more about what was unsaid. and could be counted on to be willing to learn more.

    Why does this come up here.
    Cadet Thoomie is mundane.
    One of the scenes is around the settlements communal breakfast fire.
    Tod has just finished his first night sleeping in the house of the missing family, made the home base of the new Watch, and bedroom of the watch commander.

    Thommie wearing his new cadet uniform perfectly made and tailored.. if it had been made 200 years earlier.
    And Thommie reported that during the night and early morning a strange group of people had arrived.

    Here is the issue of heroes point of view. Vlad.. a local bounty hunter well known to the settlement was surprised to find himself returned as he was five days travel away. And Tod was very surprised to see Vlad.. since he was obviously dead, to a heroes eyes and a Vampyr thrall-broken servant.
    while to a mundane he looks to be a perfectly fine fellow.
    While our Thommie is a mundane he happens to be a "rune-scribed fryend" of the bush-li'ls 'a type of gnome'.
    One if the strangers looks perfectly normal to Thommie but Tod sees strange beast like ears.

    So an aspect of this world the visual cues a hero sees and the mundane masque that hides some of the thrall bonded or fae appear between shifts of POV.

    Thommie was the point of view I added.. and it went okay.
    But as I did it I began attempt to fuse the other sections.
    Tod's, Vlad's, Both heroes, to follow and lead Thommie's, what I am satisfied with is that I have all the information in the four sections I want to convey.

    But realize that it will take several more sections to make it not feel like dropping in a shopping list.
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Comments

  1. GrahamLewis
    I find it hard to have anything relevant to say to your concerns, because you aren't sharing the story, just your ideas and overview. I think you'd be much better off writing it as best you can and putting it in the workshop, and asking others what they think it needs. What you have provided here is simply the "shopping list" that you are trying to avoid. Whether the story needs a "bridge" will depend as much on what you actually write as on what you are planning to write. IMHO.
  2. Drake GreenWood
    I haven't been around long enough or completed all the requirements to post.
    And while today's start was okay.. and I got work done.
    The flow now stinks.
    So I will re-edit and add some other POV sections to spread out the character intro.
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