Child care

By paperbackwriter · Feb 21, 2019 · ·
  1. My current job is a school janitor. (he says with much embarrassment)
    Recently when I clean the library, there is a woman looking after 3 or 4 kids of around 5 or 6 years old in there at the same time. After school care.
    I cant help but be glad I am a cleaner and not looking after those kids. Noisy, running around, short attention spans. That woman deserves triple what Im earning. Truth is she earns about the same. She does a good job under the circumstances, respecting their freedom. But her voice is being used all the time.
    "Bobby put those blocks away."
    "Johnny stop running. you'll hurt yourself."
    "Ok guys, next we gonna play cards. How does that sound?"
    'Mark. I hope you are not being naughty. Come here where I can see you."
    This goes on and on for ages.
    I was thinking to myself here is an opportunity for writing. But then ive wasted it by telling you instead of showing. one of the writing golden rules already.

Comments

  1. Malisky
    This is not telling. It's first person for... Whachou mean? I'm a master in telling and this ain't telling. :p
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  2. paperbackwriter
    malisk
    ok well its not good writing either ☺
  3. GrahamLewis
    It's a good first draft. Work on it.
  4. Tom Mazur
    Paperback...don't worry about rules (for now anyway)....in order to become a good writer, you read, read, read. And then you must write write write. If your stuff is good enough you can always hire an editor. Just have fun with it.
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