Comma, Comma, Comma

By J.D. Ray · Feb 13, 2019 · ·
  1. My wife wanted to read the entirety of what I've written so far on my novel, so I compiled the text into a Word document (the Scrivener trial, by the way, is going well) and opened it in Word to see how it looked. I'm right at 100 pages. I'm not sure how that relates to paperback novel pages, but it's a point of reference. The word count is at 44K, by far the longest thing I've ever written.

    I scrolled through the document to see how the formatting came out, and noticed that Word was calling out grammar errors. Most of them I can ignore, as the software doesn't understand dialogue (usually) or sentence styling. It does, however, understand commas (usually), and it found a lot of sentences that read like this:

    Alberti seemed to accept this explanation, and said no more about the subject.
    Word suggests I remove the comma, and after doing so, the sentence reads better. Unfortunately, Scrivener doesn't have such functionality. I'll go through the text in Scrivener with Word in a separate window and fix the issues. I'm thankful for the 28" monitor I splurged on last year.
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Comments

  1. Iain Aschendale
    I'll definitely have to try this as I'm a serial abuser of commas. @Homer Potvin accused me of "comma bukkake" once, and the jury agreed.
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  2. Homer Potvin
    Yeah... commas are abhorrent when used incorrectly.
  3. J.D. Ray
    "comma bukkake" :supergrin::supergrin::supergrin:
  4. GrahamLewis
    Unfortunately, as I and many others have sometimes bemoaned, Word's proofing is not, well, foolproof, simply because it blindly follows whatever general rules have been programmed in. And as is currently being discussed in the ongoing "stupid rules" thread, the rule-promulgators are not always in agreement anyway.

    It's even worse when it becomes a judgment call. There's this apparently true Oscar Wilde quotation: “I was working on the proof of one of my poems all the morning and took out a comma. In the afternoon—well, I put it back again.”

    I can see that applying in your example. Your original, "Alberti seemed to accept this explanation, and said no more about the subject" has a subtle suggestion that both halves of the sentence are of equal weight, which could be in tune with the idea that he only seemed to accept the explanation, which might suggest he might change his mind later.

    Without the comma, the sentence moves much faster, "Alberti seemed to accept this explanation and said no more about the subject," and makes the second half seem almost a throwaway qualifier to the first half. Which might suggest that Alberti actually did accept the explanation and thought nothing more about it.

    I'm not sure how clear -- or even correct -- I am in this, but I do know commas can have subtle impact on the way a sentence conveys information, regardless of what any general rule says.

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  5. GrahamLewis
    Every time I come across this title in your blog, my mind goes back to that 1983 song by Boy George and Culture Club, "Karma Karma Chameleon."

    Please make it stop.
  6. Homer Potvin
    Oh, great, now it's stuck in my head... thanks.
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  7. Iain Aschendale
    I assumed that was the intention.
  8. J.D. Ray
    I almost titled the post “Comma Chameleon”, but then thought that was a little “on the nose”. Also, some people might choose to invoke Neil Sedaka. There, now you have both songs stuck in your head. :D
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