Might be a bad writer with good ideas. O_o

By Cave Troll · May 30, 2020 · 692 · 2
  1. I have come to the conclusion working on this current WIP,
    that I may have good ideas, but not so good a writing ability.

    To be fair I started this new adventure to challenge myself
    and get away from all the profanity and extreme violence.
    So far I think I have stayed fairly well away from those things,
    with some sparse bits for the antogonistic monster thing
    that offers the Horror element for my story, but it doesn't
    speak (nor is it capable, at least not with it's mouth and it
    doesn't have telepathy either).

    Maybe I am just being harder on myself due to navigating
    new territory and a slower mellower tone, with a ton of
    dialogue to move things forward. IDK.
    Struggling with the emotional aspects of one MC that is
    working on her first F/F relationship, and trying to not
    make it all a pronoun CF, but it ain't easy.

    Oh well, that is all I have for now based on what I have
    heard from the ladies and group.
    Thus I will leave you with a short intro to Chapter 9
    which happens to be my favorite part of the 21K I
    have so far.

    Thanks for stopping by. :supersmile:


    Quilani stood outside the house that she swore was modeled after a dolls home. Double checking the address beside the right top of the door frame, and what she had written down. She surly stood out like a sore thumb in black leather pants that laced up the sides, and longsleeve white belly shirt. Contrasting the pristine suburban aesthetic she thought was only in fiction.

    She took a deep breath and feigned not to notice how awkward it was. She rang the doorbell, and the cheerful acute melody was the tipping point that she cringed.

    “Hello Quilani, so glad you could make it.” Lintalia greeted her with her bubbly personality.

    “Hey.” Quilani beamed back. “Is your neighbor looking at me through the blinds?” She spoke through her gritted smile.

    “Uh, huh.” Her head bobbed, and she waved around Quilani. She restrained herself from face palming, or stopping the flailing arm. “Please, come inside.”

    Quilani gladly entered the doll house, shaking off the creepy sensation that her fellow classmate confirmed.

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  1. Steve Rivers
    I think what I like most about reading other people's work is when they use apt words of description that I don't think of, and I leave thinking "Why don't I use the word feign more? It's so much nicer than pretended."
    Then I think my vocabulary must suck.
    Then I hate myself.
    OMG CAVE TROLL, YOU MADE ME FEEL AWFUL!
    ( i kid, i kid )
    :supertongue:

    On a more sensible note, it's good to be hard on yourself, but you should also give yourself a pat on the back for exploring new territory that you don't normally do. We don't learn anything new or grow by rehashing stuff, after all. I get daunted when tackling a new subject, for instance, but I feel a lot better afterward when its helped me learn about it.

    *Searches amazon for an automatic back-patting machine to send to CT.*
    Steve Rivers, May 30, 2020
  2. Cave Troll
    @Steve Rivers yeah, pretend just doesn't work for a mature audience,
    unless it is sarcasm. :p

    I have help in being hard on my stuff, cause the ladies in group are
    always ready to take my story apart letter by letter. :D
    Cave Troll, May 30, 2020
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