Not sure how to write the following

By Coconut · May 30, 2012 · ·
  1. Does the following sentence sound all right?

    I can see the shades of the moving in the wind trees

Comments

  1. Cogito
  2. The Blood Countess
    Nuh-uh.
    "I can see the shadows of the moving in the wind trees." <--- Maybe. :) Or "I can see the shadows of the moving through the wind trees." It's odd to be using "moving" as a noun.
  3. Mckk
    What on earth is "the moving"? You can see movement, and you can also see moving leaves, but you cannot see "THE moving". And there's no such thing as "wind trees" unless it's a fictional type of trees, in which case, by all means keep it. But if "wind trees" was used as a play on language or some kind of poetry, then it doesn't work because I've no idea what "wind trees" are meant to be.

    The only way I can understand the sentence is this: "I can see the shadows of the rustling (or moving) leaves in the trees" or "The wind touched the leaves, swaying them in its wake" or something.
  4. maidahl
    There are no trees made of wind. Maybe the shades are drawn in the forest.
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