Points of View

By GrahamLewis · Apr 6, 2018 · ·
  1. I regularly visit this site and one other. I'm fascinated by the different tones. Here, the emphasis seems to be clearly (and I think properly) on writing per se, that is, on technique and style and effect. The other site is more of a club, in which the regulars post things that please each other. Nice stories, usually happy endings -- or at least morally redeeming bad ones. That became clear to me when I posted my recent flash fiction piece, "I Thought It Was Funny" on both sites.

    On the other site, I have always before followed the lite formula, and gotten affirmative responses, both to the content and the style. This latest piece, IMHO, had no redeeming social value, and the silence there was deafening. No responses. While the usual lighter pieces by others got pleasant little comments.

    Here, so far, few comments, but the one I got, and the ones I expect to get, if any, focused on the effectiveness of the piece in conveying a dark outcome. That I think is what a writers' site should be, acknowledging that the purpose of writing is not to (or at least no only to) make people feel good, it's to reflect on and amplify possibilities, good and bad, redeeming and depressing, and a place to evaluate technique and effectiveness, independent of mo.

    I guess it depends on one's point of view. Hallmark vs. Stephen King.

    I like it better here.

Comments

  1. Corbyn
    It's my belief that when people don't know what to say about something or don't want to offend someone with their opinion, they default to only giving what they consider to be pleasant comments or vague niceties about a piece. I'm probably totally wrong about that. But it's been my experience that if someone really likes your work and wants to see you do something with it, they make suggestions. It doesn't matter if they're good, bad, irrelevant, or completely unhelpful. If they really have an interest in how you're progressing they try in their own way to add to your journey.

    Personally, I feel like you conveyed a dark outcome. It was evident that at the least something very bad happened to the boy who fell, and at the worst, he died due to the fact that nobody really looked for him. It doesn't get much more of a dark outcome than that in my opinion. As I mentioned in that post if anything I would've liked to have seen the other boys nonchalance at life and things a bit more. Play up the fact that he didn't offer info, or see the need to volunteer where the second boy might be. It doesn't have to be extravagant, because it's a short piece, but a bit more would be awesome.
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