teaser/excerpt from my current project!

By jesseabigail · Dec 26, 2012 · 520 · 2
  1. If I could pick the two most annoying people in the house, I would say Abi and fucking Ino. They never shut up. Everyone thinks I’m obnoxious? That’s fucked. Those two are always chattering away at one-thousand miles per hour and laughing hysterically to themselves over shit that doesn’t make sense. And I’m trapped rooming with them. Thanks, Puke.

    Maybe I’ll ask Ryan to let me in with him. I can’t handle this shit anymore. I mean, Abi and I got along at the first party. She wasn’t too bad–even though she’s the one that got me fucking shot–and if it wasn’t for her tripping over the piss bomb, I wouldn’t have been arrested–so I guess Abi is a little fucked. But all of us are. I don’t know. Maybe I just have to get used to them.

    And BPC? They’re done. They crossed the fucking line.

    Big time.

    –Evan

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  1. Hwaigon
    I got the feeling that it was a female-written post in her dairy... I got a bit confused by -Evan. Almost seemed like Darya's
    college years. Nice opening for a high-school/universtiy based horror or thriller, though I don't know your plans with it. It reads well without major disturbances.
    One thing: I'm not against the use of the word "fuck", but it seemed quite abundant in such a small exerpt :D

    cheers
    Hwaigon, Dec 26, 2012
  2. pinkbliss00
    I loved reading this and I hope there's more to come. The characters mentioned were definitely interesting and the narrator had much to say. I think the foul language fitted in perfectly. :)
    pinkbliss00, Jan 12, 2013
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