The Light I Saw : The Progression and Finale

By Jane Beryl · Jul 11, 2010 · 425

Alright, so after trying to make myself better and change the past, I will now show you what happened in the past and what is the new look on my old poem.

"The Light I Saw" version 1

When I went to your house, I saw no one.
When I ran to you, your heart broke.
When I hugged you, you cried.
When I tried to comfort you, you turned cold.

I loved you more than the sun.
I wished you to be happy more than the world.
I walked with you until the end of the world.
I am yours to have and to hold.

I wanted to kiss you.
I wanted to adore you.
I wanted to hold you.
I wanted you to see the light that I see.
I saw the light in you.

You saw the world with a fright.
I tried to show the kindness of the world.
You were scared, and ran away from my love.
Your heart was a stone when we first met,
But now it's human.
As time passed,
You loved more.

As time passed,
Your stone heart crumbled.
As time passed,
You found someone to love.
Though it was not me,
I'm glad you saw the light I saw.
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"The Light I Saw" version 2

When I went to your house, I saw no one.
When I ran to you, your heart shattered.
When I hugged you, you cried in pain.
When I tried to comfort you, you turned on the snow.

I loved you more than the solution I breathe.
I wished you to be happy more than a child gives joy to a toy.
I walked with you until Armageddon came and left us be.
I am yours, my red string wrapped around your body.

I wanted to kiss you.
I wanted to adore you.
I wanted to hold you.
I wanted you to see the light that I saw.

I saw the light in you.
You saw the world with a fright.
I tried to show the kindness of the world.
You were scared, and ran away from my love.
Your heart was iced over when we first met,
But now it's human.

As time passed,
You loved more.
As time passed,
Your cold stone shield crumbled.
As time passed,
You found someone to love.
It was not me but
I'm glad you saw the light I saw.
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"The Light I Saw" version 3

When I ran to you, your heart shattered.
When I hugged you, you cried in pain.
When I comforted you, your heart iced over.

I loved you more than my living breath.
I walked with you until Armageddon came and left us.
I am yours, my red string wrapped around your body.

I saw the light in you, yet
you saw the world with fear.
I tried to show you kindness
but you ran away from my love.
Your heart was frozen when we met
But now it has thawed.

As time passed,
You found someone.
And though it was not I,
I'm glad you saw the light.
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Thank you Jo, Frost and Breathe for your critisims and support. You shall see my oldies pop up again as I still have writer's block.

Also, something I found, Elementary School Girl Syndrome is starting to take a buzz. While, I think I was the one who told Frost about it, at the same time, I think the disease reference is spreading. I'm contagious, oh boy, everyone run!
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