Oh cripes! The moment that I realised I could have chosen a different point of view for my beloved manuscript and it would have been so much easier. Certainly, easier to write. It didn't hit me like a train exactly but all the same, I have had something to think about recently.
The thing is, I am presuming that publishers and agents like things to be nice and straight forward. Easy if you like. They could see problems far more quickly than us writers. This is why I am starting to worry about my choice of point of view.
To be fair to the story, readers seem to navigate the complexity of 3rd person and are lapping up the multi-story threads, but I wonder if I am walking into a niche market which is what I don't want.
If I might explain: My point of view character are in a kind of unintentional Christmas tree formation. Two MC's take the lion share of the action (lets say 65%). Underneath supported by another two MC's who play significant roles (maybe 35% and they share these scenes apart from the main two MC's). Then there are five MC's that play a lesser but reasonably significant role without p.o.v. At the bottom somewhere is the antagonist that is lurking under the foliage waiting for his moment to steal the show - although that little upstart will have to wait his turn, he is hardly allowed to speak, let alone p.o.v. Then there are many characters that have been introduced for depth and future roles of some sort.
I am entirely confident that I have used multiple 3rd p.o.v correctly and consistently. Beta readers have responded positively but one seems to have been flawed by the point of view changes and multiple threads.
Closed third person would have been a doddle. This story if it works will have the scale of GOT & LOTR but it is certainly not a Silmarillion. I wish that someone could point a stick at what is wrong. I wonder should I take the easier road which would be Harry Potterish...
Are there any more experienced writers than myself that can lend a helpful perspective on this for me? Send me a direct message if you prefer.
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