losthawken Jul 29, 2009
Aww, I like to read stuff like this. Its nice to hear that there are good father daughter relationships :) Your first sentance sounds great to me. Editors usually are quick to point out things that catch the eye as awkward, but for yours I think that that is likely the point. To grab the reader with a confusing line that forces them to go on to reconcile it. Anywho, congrats on the good review :-D