Trigger Finger

By Wreybies · Aug 12, 2017 · 721 · 7
  1. Trigger Finger

    It holds the pen above the page.

    Turns the key to endless rage.

    On lands of gender, race, and thought.

    Conversations tied in a knot.

    Sputter, spit, fall to the floor.

    Causes, pauses, ire galore.

    Boredom guides the trollish hand.

    Lemming-like, we join the band.

    We dance and follow, you and me,

    over the cliff and into the sea.

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  1. jannert
    Gosh. This exists on lots of different levels.
    jannert, Aug 12, 2017
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  2. Wreybies
    Doesn't it, tho? ;)
    Wreybies, Aug 12, 2017
  3. jannert
    Especially after today's news, and the scary stuff developing out there.
    jannert, Aug 12, 2017
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  4. big soft moose
    The only thing i don't like is the rhyming of thought and knot - that could be a uk/us pronunciation thing
    other than that bravo
    big soft moose, Aug 12, 2017
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  5. obsidian_cicatrix
    Can't say 'thought' and 'knot' gave me pause. Must be my accent. I did pick up on the syncopation of 'con-ver-sa-tion' and 'tied-in-a-knot' though. Like subtle drum rolls, quads.
    obsidian_cicatrix, Aug 13, 2017
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  6. matwoolf
    Wrey says Moose says

    On lands of gender, race, and thad. On lands of gender, race, and thawrt

    Conversations tied in a knad. Conversations tied in a nott.
    matwoolf, Aug 15, 2017
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  7. 123456789
    You could improve the rhythm a bit, I think, if you could get rid of a in "tied in a knot" maybe make knots plural?
    123456789, Aug 17, 2017
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