Thank you Chickenfreak. That is definitely an eye-opening critique. I'll work on it, and repost the fixed version.
Here's a query I've written for my recent novel Eureka! Be as brutally honest, and critical as possible. I promise I can take it. Walter is...
I haven't ever seen alien invasion as a sub-genre. I would probably just stick with science fiction.
From when my main character has a chance encounter with the woman he is to fall in love with: To me there existed no greater comparison....
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