OK thanks very much guys. very sound advice, I'll try approaching it from third-person limited and hopefully I can get my head into that approach....
Ok now this is some very interesting stuff to me as a total newb. Something I didn't clearly outline before was that I want the audience to feel a...
Ok that's great feedback, I have to admit that I'm a tad confused and slightly overwhelmded with the prospect of slipping from one perspective to...
Ok thanks very much to the people that have tried to help - and not so much to the people taking it off-topic to bag the guy trying to help a newb...
I'm not really sure. The way I was writing it was more third person but the feedback I was given was that it didn't really capture anybody's...
I'm a total newb here, and with writing also, so I apologise if I'm doubling up with something already covered, but I couldn't find the answer I...
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