congrats, hope everything goes great with it jim
Been a long time hello all, its been a long time since I have been back here, been some rough times going on and through a career change,...
i think most are taken but there is always someone out there with a spark, a new idea that will spring alive and make people say WOW. jim
im not upset, what you said is more true than not. its hard to tell without the big picture what is going on. jim
you all got some great ways to rewrite stuff, thanks for all the advice jim
good point. the main reason why i put the slug part in cause im using it to help explain the crappy enviroment she is forced to live in. IE: dirt...
I changed the sentence to this instead. I think it reads beter. The streaks left on the window by the rain reminded her of the occasional...
thanks for all the great responses. quess i will use 2 chapters and do my best at making the reader know that its actually going on all at once. jim
Ok, is this possible, i want to write two chapters, one right after the other. One describing one event and the other describing a different...
will this sentence work? will the reader understand shes comparing the streaks of water to the slug/snail tracks she finds on her bedroom floor....
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