I’d also recommend pretty much anything by Donald Maass; he’s a major literary agent and editor, and has a knack for describing writing techniques...
Conflict might be the missing piece here. Can you add secrets/real-world conflicts bleeding into their virtual interactions? Particularly...
I tend to have a big picture plot overview, big picture character development, a few key turning-point scenes, and at least the opening few scenes...
What are some fantasy shows or movies you’ve enjoyed? If you’ve only read one book since middle school, reading just about anything will help...
For most beta readers, getting a good book for free is the payment (and you should be looking for betas who like the kind of stuff you write). A...
You could do something simple like, they are both invited to an event or party, have too much to drink. Maybe he’s feeling lonely and she’s there...
On the matter of the MRI, no. They would most likely use a CT (Computed Tomography) scan, which uses X rays. An MRI machine is a giant super...
Seconding this, scene breaks (or section breaks? I always forget what the double space is called) allows you to cleanly switch between two point...
I rather like this list, actually. Your mileage may vary if you have a very very short first chapter, but for an average length one, this is...
No, typically you only tell agents when you’ve received an offer (and that’s as a follow up email to all the agents who already have your...
I suppose that would really depend on many different factors: the genre, the themes, the target audience, what other elements are there to drive...
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