I think, with the benefit of the voices here that a lot of it is intuitive. What jannert articulated about the prose being choppy is what...
a) That's very helpful, thanks so much. Been driving me up the wall. b) Definitely the second one. I couldn't tell you why; just instinctively...
When, after someone has finished speaking, do you go to a new paragraph? If they perform an action after speaking does it stay on the same line?...
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